Can someone edit my Naval Officer prompt?

Throughout my whole life I have always been strictly a leader, never a follower. My experiences in my life have raised me to be strong and comfortable enough to "ride the bull instead of letting it ride you." Whether it be through constant participation in my cles, my competitive nature in my hobbies, like athletics, and my motivation as the Eastlake's Titan Regiment drumline captain, determination and hard work remain to be the fundamentals of any success in my life. Although I may be seen as a commanding figure to many, I also excel in the use of teamwork and commitment. I believe these aspects are a hardy basis in beginning my pursuit of becoming a successful Naval Officer. These daily experiences bring me further away from the norm of my peers; to excel beyond my own limitations and attempt perfection with every task at hand. I may struggle mentally or physically toward the labored task of being a military officer in the beginning, but using the Navy's guidance, I whole-heartedly believe I can obtain the ability to persevere through life's speed bumps; substituting speed bumps for unbeatable obstacles, knowing that these interferences are hard to overcome but still very attainable. I strictly believe in the motto, "Practice makes perfect," because practice involves determination, control, focus and a strong will to better yourself, which ultimately grow to achieve what may have been believed as too difficult prior to putting in the hard work. Energy in, success out.